We asked Mr Andrews to watch it and he gave us a lot of useful feedback that we can use in the production if the next one.
Between the news paper clippings, we originally had fades to black. This made it seem to change too fast, so we had it changed to dissolves so that the reader would be able to read the titles.
In the first scene with Lauren, we got told that we could have had the camera further back, as the frame cuts off the top of her head. But the shot was good as she was in the top left point of the rule of thirds.
The second scene was good as there was a leading line and I was exiting through the point at the bottom left.
The third was good as the camera case was at the bottom left point, and Lauren stays in the left two points of the rule, until we angled the camera up to face her and she was placed in the middle of the screen.
In the next shot, the desk is in an awkward position and the shot could have been angled better. If we had taken the shot from a high angle and from the top left corner of the desk, then it wouldn't look as awkward.
The shot after this is where Lauren is searching through her drawer to see if the image of the key is in there. This shot was ok, and the fact that the rule of thirds wasn't used well isn't as much as a problem as the whole point of the shot was to show that she did have the image. Also, when she brings the image out of its place in the drawer, it is in the bottom left third, helping the shot to end up looking good.
The next shot wasn't as good as the rest. Lauren was placed in the middle of the frame, which was visually unappealing. Also, she the excessive back lighting and the lack of light shining on her face made her seem more like a villain that a hero, as she was (in a way) supposed to be. We brought the brightness level up when we were editing the film, but she still seemed evil.
When comparing the keys in the next shot, her right hand is in the bottom right point of the rule of thirds, but there isn't any leading lines leading your eye to the key. As the key is the focal point of the image, it isn't that good of a shot. But it does show that the keys are the same, bringing some sense into the film.
When Lauren comes out of the 'headquarters' the shot is quite awkward. Although it ends up working as Lauren walks to the left points of the rule of thirds, we could have filmed it from further to the left. It would conceal the villain (a.k.a. Millie) a bit better and also it would make it more visually pleasing. Also, we should have used a tripod as the shot is quite shaky.
The next shot is quite good as it uses the rule of thirds quite well, but the only problem was that we couldn't originally see the gun when we changed the movie to black and white. To fix this problem, we had to brighten the shot.
When Lauren clenches her fist around the key, it ends up looking quite good. Even though her hand and the key weren't originally in the rule, her fist moves into the rule as she clenches it.
The next shot was troublesome. The gun and the camera were both shaky, but in a way that adds the fact that Lauren is supposed to be scared. But the shot should have been taken from Millie's left so that the gun is closer to the camera than Millie and have the gun in the bottom left point of the rule of thirds and Millie in the top right.
The next shot is awkward as Lauren's hand is located closer to the centre of the screen, but it effectively shows that she got killed without having to show the gore of the action.
The next is a shot of the key. It was a fill in shot as the shots before and after it were too similar and caused the movie to become too informal and, in a way, awkward. Although we tried to make it as smooth as possible, it still ended up shaky.
The next shot could have been taken from a different angle, and we could have placed Lauren's hand one of the points of the grid, and Millie's foot.
The last shot of the film would have been better if we had taken it from further to the right. The leading lines make the shot work, but if we had have her start walking at the right of the grid and leave at the left.
But in the end, the film turned out quite well. We just need to fix up a few shots... Well, most of them.
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